Lyrics

I wrote this song for an upcoming gig, and just thought I'd get your opinion. This is probably the third or fourth song I've attempted, but only the second that has come to fruition. It follows the typical blues progression, where the verse falls in the I - I - IV - I part, and the chorus is the turnaround. It's simply titled "Rhythm and Blues (It's all good)".

Got yourself a bright red guitar

You've got rhythm but aren't going far

Buddy there's something you missed

Put a little blues on the list



Got to have that rhythm and blues

And then it's all good



Can't get the crowd out of their seats

They got the rhythm but aren't moving their feet

If you wanna knock them out of their shoes

Gotta give your rhythm a little blues



Chorus



You got a beautiful girl to show around

She likes to dress up and get down

You say she's got good rhythm too

Don't forget with rhythm comes blues



Chorus



Your baby packed up and left town

Left you on a train hell-bound

All it takes to beat the pain that ensues

Just put a little rhythm in your blues



Chorus

Whatcha think? I think the chorus still needs a little work.

Sounds like something I'd play a honky tonk.

Not great lyrics, but they are fun lyrics!

Thanks, fun is definately what I was shooting for.

not my type of thing but its alright, fun s definitely the correct description

I like the lyrics... They are much... Funner, less depressing, less about conspiracys-society-metaphysics and other things then my stuff...

Also, they are better... :P

:D

Quite honestly, we don't really have to write about the bad things in our lives all the time. Sometimes, you just want some fun lyrics.

For instance, Toby Keith's "I Love This Bar" is just about a good time at a bar.

It's not bad. I, like the others, agree that it is "Fun"

i gotta say, i really liked it, i think its quite clever actually

i really like your lyrics. not only are you talking about blues, but you gave it a real good explanation of what blues is to the soul - the good things, the bad things, blues is there kinda like a good friend! way to go!

"I ain't as good as I once was" I lmao every time I listen to that song, it's one of my favorite Toby Keith songs.