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Ozzfan486  
13 Aug 2009 15:52 | Quote
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Until my dad gets home and we can work on my amp. Soooo I'll throw out some lyrics. Basically finished, I'll make any corrections when transfering the from paper to text. Here goes...

What I See

One more low-life who thought he could tame you
He was just one of so many who've attained you
I've not yet been surprised
You've been under my watchful eye
And I bet you never thought
That something right under your nose
Could possibly pack the hardest blow
But hard that blow may be
I still see you look at me
You mind wonders aimlessly
Through the desert
Through the trees
Across the seas
And back at me
Thats your life as it looks to me
And you still cry
Cry on your knees
And moan and **** and shake the breeze
But you should thank god
For he sent me
Through the desert
Through the trees
Across the seas
He sent me

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Controller

What a ray of sunshine
Stand wisely in your shine
Can't stand to feel defeat
So you rig the symphony
Before they hit the beat

I can't see how you think you're better
When you cheated to get this far
Maybe I'll send a nasty letter
For you to read in your expensive car
You're always looking for another way
You postpone you're test to another day
So you don't feel the slow decay
Like all the rest

But when you think you're free
There'll be a test from me..
And when you beg so miserably
And change the questions
It just won't matter
For I'm changing the answers


Tell me what you think.
Ozz

Oh, BTW, I have one more but it's a bit more edgy. If nobody cares I'll post it.
Phip  
13 Aug 2009 16:02 | Quote
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Ozzy,
I like the second one best. like the part about changing the answers, and the part about rigging the symphony before the first beat.
edgy eh? yeah, post it!
Big buddy
Ozzfan486  
13 Aug 2009 16:27 | Quote
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Big buddy lmao.

Uhmm, okay. Just no-one get pizzed.

Bad ADViCE

You're a two face *** with two tits to match
You use your lies to lure your latest catch
And they eat it up
Down the hatch
You lie to the guys
You lie to the girls
You lie so much that lawyers hurl
[That's a generic line, Im working on it]

Well this song is for all who believed your sh1t
Your make believe
I'm sick of it
So heres too you, you can suck my [Scream into the chorus]

Here's some new advice
It's not so great
But for you it will suffice
To take you out in a crate
Stop spreading your lies that infect like lice
For those who believed are living off rice
You tell 'em all to roll the dice
But you take the earnings
And you make nice
You'll do anything to keep the answer out sight
But don't believe I'll go down
Without a fight
Phip  
13 Aug 2009 18:14 | Quote
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well I gotta say you put some passion into that one! YIKES
Actually i like the first half. the second part kinda lost me.
There's some real emotion there if you could clarify it a little. I think almost anyone could relate to the theme.
Phip
P.S.
I kinda played around with those lyrics (just for fun and personal exercise) but I won't post them unless you want me to. (don't want to step on toes ya know?)
Phip
P.S. I hope you get over her soon! :) she sounds charming!
Ozzfan486  
13 Aug 2009 18:39 | Quote
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lol. Actually controller was about some cocky tyrant-ish person I thought of in school last year and expanded on. The other two were about two different people. And yeah post it man. I love hearing other people's work.
Phip  
13 Aug 2009 18:53 | Quote
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okee dokee
I tried to clarify the theme a litte based on what i thought you were going after....


Talkin’ outa both sides of your face
Hiding your lies behind a veil of lace
The boys eat it up
Baby don’t they eat it up
And if the truth be told
Woman it’s just gettin’ old
I didn’t know you when and I don’t know you now


You never seem to stop movin’ your lips
You’re not for real and
I'm sick of it
Next time you open your mouth, you can suck my [Scream into the chorus]

Now listen to me woman
it’s my turn to say
I’m gonna break your spell
do it my own way
Your gonna stop feedin’ me
all those lies
Just enough garbage to
keep me alive
And get it into your head
I don’t believe a single word you said
Baby when I look at you
I see a love that’s dead
Ozzfan486  
13 Aug 2009 18:57 | Quote
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That was AWSOME Phip. Seriously dude.
Phip  
13 Aug 2009 19:51 | Quote
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thanks man. it was fun just playing around with it. good experience!
Phip
Ozzfan486  
13 Aug 2009 20:06 | Quote
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Sounded incredible. If you want you can use it dude. No feet stepped on here haha. I think it'd be great if you put music to it.
Ozzfan486  
14 Aug 2009 11:29 | Quote
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J05H  
14 Aug 2009 13:59 | Quote
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hahahahahahahahahahahahah the 3rd 1 iz funny
Ozzfan486  
14 Aug 2009 17:56 | Quote
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lol.


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