How's my playing?

Hey again, I just recorded this little piece... at about 1:45 AM, so I'm a little tired during this, but, I would like to have some feedback on my playing.
So any at all would be awesome, thanks ahead of time
Also, just for a poll, do you think that I recorded this on an acoustic or an unplugged electric?




And sorry if it seems like I'm spamming, I want to get feedback on recordings that I do.

Nothing extraordinary, but not bad at all. Not really my EXACT kind of thing, but whatever.

You need to build up the stamina. your playing is very clear at start and you hang on with the rythm and beat very well, but you lose consentration pretty fast. Keep up practising m8.

i agree w/ Empirism

...now my thoughts:

1- you really need to loosen up a bit.
2- conversely, take a good listen w/ a metronome, find where you are missing a transition and play the transition/pattern between the two patterns that 'bookend' it and play it til yer arm is dead, then move to the next. (btw, i aint saying "play like a Metronome", good God no ... just get that tempo and transitional tempo stuff down while using one; later, you can toss the metronome)

lastly, and don't take this the wrong way, but...
3- you played the track with an acute lack of confidence in yourself (sounds like) much like some of my young students who are asked on lesson 4 or so to: "okay, show me that F-Ionian you learned a few weeks ago". They CAN play it but something freezes.

I DO like the chordal choices and the pattern, i simple think you picked the apple before it was ripe enuff.

RAWK!
Cs

1. Some of the picking is a little sloppy towards the end
2. Try to smoothen some of those chord changes

And I'm going to guess by the lack of sustain that this is on an unplugged electric >.

thanks guys :)

Feedback is always greatly appreciated

and just jeff is right, its my little squier...

it almost sounds like its gunna fade into some crazy death metal

Umm, yeah. We kinda figured it to be an unplugged electric.

it sounds pretty kewll ,i,d put a badass metal riff 2 follow it,but thats up 2 u,but over all pretty kewll